Saturday, May 23, 2009

Tangled (a Snippet)

I rummage through clutter filled hallways,

cutting myself on sharp edges.

Voices echo...

I shiver in remembrance.

Tangled up in cobwebs,

I look for the spider.

2 comments:

  1. Strong use of an image with literal and metaphorical significance, Cheryl. Your style has gotten much more focused lately. I especially like your use of punctuation here, also the way you displace masterfully into past fugue trance.

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  2. Thank you, John. I have been working hard on editing and cutting words in my writing.

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